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Cute. There was a lot of "telling" versus "showing" especially in the beginning, and it felt like you pulled the perspective back a bit from Evan toward the end (instead focusing unduly on Jared, whose inner thoughts Evan would not know so explicitly). But it was sweet and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing. :)

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I LOVED THISSS. As you already knew lol but the ending was also perfect! Like I said - I love when writers describe the feeling of desperation, and this did not disappoint lol. It was also definitely an accurate portrayal of how desperation can creep up slowly on a person. Poor Evan. I was glad you had Jared there to comfort him after the accident, and the kiss was a cute surprise! Yay!!

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