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orangelion

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  1. Happy late birthday! Since I couldn't reply on the your actual birthday
  2. It haven't read any of Stephen King's books, but I have heard that his sex scenes aren't great. You don't have to be social on here. Some of the best writers on here aren't very social either.
  3. I think think your writing is that weird. I've definitely seen weirder things. Unless you count the omo stuff as weird then that does increase the weirdness. Though of course omo isn't weird considered weird on this site.
  4. From this version, it'd have to be with Sarah. It was fun seeing her get desperate, but trying to maintain composure and act professional. From the previous version, I'd have to say with Karenna and Nia. All the games they played together were fun and interesting. You already know I prefer peeing scenes
  5. I really enjoyed that scene and thought it fit just fine. I was wondering when she was going to use her acid pee again since she had only used it once before this point, unless I'm failing to remember another instance.
  6. That was great and I don't mind the length at all! I like this version of Sarah better than the one. In the original version she was a bit of a jerk. By the way, how did Sarah not get a wet spot from her morning leak? She should have gotten a spot from when she leaked in the car while driving to Mary-Ann's office, unless she had her skirt up. And then she should have gotten a spot when she sat back down on the seat that still had a bit of pee on it. By the way, there is an error here and I'm not entirely sure what it is supposed to say.
  7. I just got around to reading this because I was busy for the past week. Even though there isn't there isn't much action of both the combat variety and pissing variety, the introduction to a new world and characters kept me entertained. It makes me excited for the next chapters.
  8. This is a great start! I think a light novel might be the best of both worlds in regards to written stories and comics. It allows for visuals and key moments and the text shows the reader extra details that may be difficult to convey with an image.
  9. I totally understand that. I'm just saying, I wouldn't be opposed to Vaine fighting a sith lord. It would fit the sci-fi setting.
  10. So an author is writing about an author writing an autobiography. That's some authorception. I really enjoyed the glimpse into Vaine's present life and it makes me wonder how the story will get there. I also love Vaine's human form. I'm not really into anthros. They don't turn me off, but I much prefer humans. I just read this story cause I really like everything else about it. I look forward to part 2! Well, Star Wars does state that is takes place in a galaxy far far away. So you could conceivably make Vaine visit a far away galaxy and make it canon
  11. Keep holding it. I think some dice rolls would be good. It would add a game of chance to the story. Like we. could attempt to hold it, but if we roll a medium number then we leak, or if we roll a low number then we lose complete control
  12. I think you mean the first letter. That is very clever. I would not have thought of looking for that. I was looking for one of the character's saying it using slightly different words.
  13. I looked for it and I couldn't find it. Where is it? If you don't mind me asking. At least it's faster than a strolling garden snail:) That sounds like it'll look great if you manage to make it work
  14. The attached video is from this model: https://www.pornhub.com/model/goddess-hailey/videos It seems that she deleted the video from her profile for some reason. There is this other video from another model: https://www.pornhub.com/view_video.php?viewkey=ph6095e9768f885 There is also this Twitter account. They are a female that transitioned to male. They still have a female body. They are just taking hormones that make their voice deeper and their body hairier. Their videos are quite good. https://twitter.com/BDSMbookwyrm/media I Peed myself_Goddess Hailey_1080p.mp4
  15. The original source is right here in higher quality: https://www.pornhub.com/view_video.php?viewkey=ph61a366ef73d45 The model also has a lot of other similar videos on her profile.
  16. This is a great new chapter! I really enjoyed all the new scenes and I did not expect the locker room shower pee. I'm guessing Vanessa will be back in a future chapter? The only things I thought was off is that Mary-Ann just pulls undresses Karenna without consent. Since they haven't done anything like that before, Mary-Ann wouldn't really know if Karenna is OK to being exposed in front of Mary-Ann. Of course we know that Karenna absolutely doesn't mind it given that she has a crush on Mary-Ann, but Mary-Ann doesn't know that yet.
  17. orangelion

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    I don't think I've seen a drawing of someone genuinely marking another person.
  18. I love these animations!
  19. I greatly enjoyed it. It was something different and I think it was well executed. Yeah, it had been going on for a long time. After the Valentine's Day chapter, I think you should tone down the number of sex scenes and/or make them shorter to speed up the progress of the story. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy the sex scenes, but there have been a lot of them lately and that take up a big portion of the chapter. Aside from that, I'm looking forward to the Valentine's Day chapter to see Paisou, Jason, and Erin handle it.
  20. I was wondering when they wore the same dress. I quickly searched the previous chapters in case I missed it or didn't remember. I do enjoy the art and I can say that you have definitely been improving over time. I appreciate that you've been writing this story for so long. Looking forward to reading that.
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