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PaolaR

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  1. Are you sure you aren't Rowling's evil twin? I mean, this story is really good, and it seems to remind me of Draco and Hermoine exactly as in the books. Interesting that Malfoy would outsmart her on identifying ingredients that would make the potion he wanted, but then again, I suppose it could be passed off as she just wasn't thinking like that where perverted Draco was. LOL. Anyway, great new chapter!
  2. I really truly wish I could write like this! This story is fantastic on so many levels! The story is awesome. The description and the though that goes into each paragraph makes me feel like I could be one of the characters, or someone nearby, witnessing everything that is happening, and wondering myself, about things that have not yet come to light. This might be one of the best epics on this site!
  3. This is really good, but I'm a little disappointed that she got away from no one finding out at all. Well, I can hope for her to be found out later.... Do you think Hermoine would be really cute if she peed her pants by accident or otherwise? I'm just wondering. I personally think the actress who played her would be really cute if she were wearing dampened jeans from a near accident. (ACtually, a partial accident where she peed about 1/4 to 1/3 of her self into her jeans.) Your Writing is so good, I am nearly hanging on each word.
  4. I wish I could write this good! The characters are somewhat believable (given that they do unnatural kinds of magic, even as magic goes), and it 's always interesting when poor cute Kaeda-san (chan) has to pee! So, I wonder what connection the HERO? and J have in common? It seems somewhere in the story, it was brought up that the liquid hero has to keep tabs on J even though the scientists are trying to find a permanent solution for the superhero. One of the things that disturbs me about this, story, though, is that It feels like all the girl characters end up wetting at some point. It's becoming too common place to believeably be a shock to the audience or to the main character, J. I'm not trying to say you can't do what you want with your story, but to keep it interesting, I think the wetting scenes should and the people that wet should be a little more... controlled? But that's just me?
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