Jimmy Olsen

Very artsy! She's so desperate it's affecting the ink lines! This set is excellent but I'm confused as to why she's still holding when she's sitting on the toilet.

The queen is lovely!

Lovely!

I enjoyed this. Very good descriptions (and not just of the bodily functions). I look forward to the next chapter and the inevitable dropping of Eliza's load.

Just gonna bump this one more time.

@Livewire101 Thanks for commenting on my messing fics! It made my day.

I really like the parrot-colored girl with the high-pressure urine stream.

Nice comic! I especially like the first panel, with her desperate pose and the look on her face as she considers the container. On the downside, the urine looks quite opaque.

Nice! I like her pose and the motion-blurred jet of urine. Her face came out cute, too.

You're not a bad writer, you just need to work on the details and the tension-building. I'd recommend rereading stories you enjoy and taking note of how things are described and how things develop and progress and climax. It's helped me.

There are a lot of options. "Pitter patter," "sprinkle tinkle," "hissy sissy," "whizzle fizzle," "splish splash" etc. "Shab baba ban" is one I've never heard.

I like every sound women's pee makes!

The girl with the bow in her hair is so cute!

I love your comic! It's always fun to see a desperate girl getting tortured by the sound of relief, and the expressions of pain and pleasure are wonderful. The sound effects are just confusing.