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  1. Idk if you read this yet, but before I wrote "No Pee Day in Hell", I wrote another Hazbin Omo fic here: And I kinda discuss my Omo headcanons for Charlie and Vaggie in the comments of No Pee Day in Hell. I'm mainly interested in seeing those two in Omo situations though. But there's plenty more Hazbin Omo fics on AO3 of all the other characters, not just Charlie and Vaggie. The Hazbin fandom on AO3 are quite kinky for obvious reasons lol.
  2. Yeah, that's the challenge with Songfics. You really gotta choose words that fit with the rhythm of the original song. And that's a really difficult thing to do for an entire song. But once you choose them correctly, it becomes such a great work of art!
  3. As someone who recently made an Omo Songfic myself, that sounds like a really fun project and I can't wait to read it and sing-along when you post this!
  4. I love how you took my ending suggestion and ran with it! You illustrated that scene way better than how I imagined it in my head, awesome job!
  5. Thanks, glad you liked my songfic! I'm curious if I'm the only one who experienced reading it the way I did. I consider myself quite a (classically) musical person, so whenever I re-read my fanfic, I can hear all the instrumentals and orchestration in my head and I can actually hear Charlie's voice singing all the modified lyrics lol. I can even hear her intonation change as she sings: With desperation in her voice as she sings that line. It's something that sounds really good and theatrical in my head, but I get the feeling that affect is kinda lost on most people (and also because everything I described is really really difficult to convey via text). I'm curious to know if you were able to imagine it as I did? And if not, what cool theatrical experience did your imagination generate?
  6. It was kind of a fluke that I realized I could replace one syllable of "Happy Day in Hell" to get "No Pee Day in Hell". And when I realized that, I was like "ok, I NEED to make an omo parody of that song now" lol. And that's how this fic was born.
  7. Most authors that write anonymously here don't want people to be able to link their Omo accounts with their main writing accounts. And posting a story on both accounts would make it really easy for someone to put some key words into Google and find the same story on both accounts. So unfortunately, I don't think we'd get the story here if that were the case. I certainly wouldn't dare to do that myself. I find this premise hilarious because it makes perfect sense given the original BatB story. I would really want to be able to read it here. But I'd respect your decision if you chose not to post it here.
  8. Happy Day in Hell was the only one that became an earworm for me. The other songs are great, but if they don't live in my head rent free, it's kinda hard to make a Songfic out of them lol (it was already quite hard to make this one). It also helps that I just needed to change one syllable from the song title in order to make it an omorashi title. Glad you enjoyed this one though!
  9. Another take on Beauty and the Beast Omo could be: Remember the scene when Belle just refused to join the Beast for dinner? What if he was just trying to show her where the bathroom is and she refuses? She stays in her room until she can't hold it anymore.
  10. Perhaps their magic carpet ride lasted a bit longer than her bladder was comfortable with. They did go all around the world on that thing after all. Maybe it suddenly runs out of magic in the middle of nowhere, no toilet in sight. Loved this story! Poor goldilocks just couldn't hold it. And the ending with the Bears ranting about why they became libertarians was hilarious 😂
  11. I absolutely loved this line and I love the premise of this story! After reading your story, it feels like such an obvious thing that Sleeping Beauty would've had to gone through lol
  12. Golden Guard

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    You commented on the artist's account and they have the same username on Pixiv as well lol. I will admit though, this was a bit hard to search on this site for some reason.
  13. The account tagged the post as "original". So unless they're lying about it, it's the original artist. There's barely any art in that account, so it's definitely not a bot account. And the art style feels mostly consistent. And for the works that don't, they feel to me like an artist experimenting with different styles. So to me, it feels very much like that is the actual account that produced this work. Also, some people like to use different usernames for different sites. Or perhaps it was reposted here by a completely different person.
  14. Fun fact, both "bukkake" and "omorashi" are Japanese loan words. The Japanese are so kinky, that whenever we need a new word to describe our kinks, we borrow them from the Japanese.
  15. This is a very fitting conclusion to my story lol! Did some searching and found a link to one of the artist's pages: https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/116371166
  16. I like to exclude certain details in my fics to allow my readers to use their imagination and interpret the story in the way they enjoy the most. How long do you want them to hold it for?
  17. I can hold it, somehow I know it I'll get Vaggie to hold it too [Charlie, hold on] There's just no toi-, -let to pee in While we travel out there's no loo [We're just recruiting] So we'll just hold, all of our pee And be des•prit by decree [This could be bad] Cheer up Vaggie, this could be swell Something tells me that today will be a no pee day in Hell! [VAGGIE, spoken] Okay, but just don't... sing to them [ANGEL DUST, spoken] That bitch is halfway down the street [VAGGIE, spoken] Is she— [ANGEL DUST, spoken] Oh, she's potty dancin' --- Several hours later --- There's a full aching feeling pulsing through my crotch. Every step so appalling it's hard not to cross. It's a real shame there's no public loos anywhere. If you don't mind the dare. It's a no pee day in Hell! There's an over stretched organ that's paying the toll. Gotta take both of my hands to shove in my hole. Doing what is required to stay in control. I'm not doing well, another no pee day in Hell. If I can hold it, then I will win An eve•ning of control [Not if I can hold more than you] Of Vaggie's bladder for ou•r bedtime sin Fine•lly taking the dom role [My bladder's taking a toll] I can hear all the voices, the whines and the moans And I know that my bladder's as hard as a stone But if I open my floodgates I'd give her first place Hope she loses post haste It'll be a no pee day in Hell --- Jazz transition --- From the porn studio where the cinephiles go To watch award winning demon om•ra•shi shows To the Big Fountain Square Where we'll certainly stare Cause oooooooh my gosh, why And I don't even dare, to, pop a squat here outsi-i-ide Cause I know I'd be marked next for heaven's genocide. --- back to normal --- I can hold it, somehow I know it I got Vaggie to hold it too There was no toi-, -let to pee in When we travel out there's no loo So we just held, all of our pee And we're des•prit by decree I can already tell, today is gonna be a fuckin' no pee day in Hell! FIN --- If you want to re-read it while listening along to the instrumental version, here's a good one: https://youtu.be/RNXAfE0Utrk?si=vu8NP8viND26LYn8 ======================= Explanation: Confused? This fic is what I would call a songfic. Basically, I wanted to omorashify the lyrics to the song "Happy Day in Hell" from S1E1 of Hazbin Hotel. Thanks to mourn365 for beta reading this fic! Behind the scenes headcanon: If you're still confused about the story content, this is the headcanon I developed while writing this songfic. Charlie and Vaggie need to go around Hell to recruit sinners to join their hotel. Charlie decides she wants to make it a bit more fun, she wants to have a pee holding contest with Vaggie while they're doing this because they both have an omo fetish. Unfortunately, there are no public toilets in Hell, because... well, it's Hell lol. Not only that, heaven forbids public urination (like literally, heaven has decreed a mandate that you're not allowed to urinate in public). Any sinner that publicly urinates will become marked as a priority target for the next extermination. There's nothing like the threat of death to prevent you from peeing, am I right? Vaggie is apprehensive about the holding contest for a variety of obvious reasons. But eventually, she agrees to it. Ground rules are implied to be that the winner gets to control the loser's bladder during sex that night. I managed to make Charlie sound British lol (originally, I used the word "wee" several times to rhyme it with the word "pee", but that felt uncreative, so I changed it lol. "Loo" is a good substitute for "toilet" and it rhymes with many more common words). I'm not British myself, but it turns out that British Omo-relevant slang is way easier to rhyme than American Omo-relevant slang.
  18. I made an epilogue chapter to "All Day at Hexside". Disclaimer: This epilogue is NOT canon compliant and contains smut. The original "All Day at Hexside" is supposed to be a plausibly canon complaint story that takes place between "Understanding Willow" and "Enchanting Grom Fright". Chapter 6 leads nicely into Grom, the epilogue ruins that. Readers' discretion is advised.
  19. Chapter 7: Epilogue Disclaimer: This epilogue is NOT canon compliant and contains smut. Chapter 6 leads nicely into Grom, this chapter ruins that. Readers' discretion is advised. --- The moment they arrived at Amity's secret hideout in the library, there was an awkward silence. Amity decided to be bold and try something. "So Luz, I noticed during class that you looked kinda excited to see me." Amity stated. Luz's cheeks were dusted a bit pink before she responded, "I'm always excited to see you Amity!" "Right, but this time, you seemed extra interested in all of my squirming." Amity said. Luz's face turned even redder. "You were staring at me while I was squirming around and holding my crotch... You liked seeing me desperate to pee, didn't you?" Amity asked. "Well- I- uh- not like Boscha-" Luz stuttered. "It's ok, I like it when you're interested cause I- I also got interested when I saw you desperate to pee." Amity admitted. Luz couldn't help but blush harder at Amity's words. "In fact-" Amity crossed her legs as she said this "-I kinda need to pee again." Amity suggestively placed a hand on her crotch and did an exaggerated squirming and potty dance. Luz's eyes widened as she tried to process what was going on. She responded with "Well, the bathroom is outside the room, down the hall to the ri-" "But Luz, do you want me to pee?" Amity asked. There was a long pregnant pause as Luz stared at Amity for about a minute. She was very much entranced by her potty dance. Then Amity whispered into her ear, "I think my bladder muscles have been weakened after what happened today, cause I have to pee badly Luz. But I won't pee unless you want me to," She tightened her hold as she said that. Luz exhaled a breath that she didn't know she was holding. "I- I want you to hold it." Luz finally replied. Amity smiled as she gripped her crotch tighter. She let out a whine before asking "how much longer?" "I don't know." Luz replied. She was clearly enjoying the view. Amity smiled at the effect she was having on Luz. For the past few nights, she's been fantasizing about this side of Luz and she's finally able to experience it. "I'm thirsty Luz, can you grab my bottle from my bag and pour it down my throat? I'll let you decide how much I should drink." Amity replied. She had fully filled her water bottle at school before they left for the library. Luz grabbed her water bottle and put it at Amity's mouth. She slowly tipped the water into her mouth. She did it slow enough so that Amity could swallow it properly, and also gave her breaks so she could breathe. But within the span of about 10 minutes, she got Amity to drink the entire 500 mL bottle. Luz loved hearing Amity's moans of desperation as the liquid entered her throat. She stared at the way her hand would grip her crotch to stave off the waves of desperation. "Wow, you made me drink the entire bottle. Now what?" Amity asked. She was still squirming around. "Let's watch a few episodes of the Azura TV series," Luz suggested. "I would love that Luz," Amity replied. Neither of them were really watching the CB. Luz was staring at Amity's motions. Amity was grabbing her crotch, squirming around, and rocking back and forth. And Amity enjoyed watching Luz's sultry face as she was watching her. "I want you to sit on my lap," Luz stated. Amity smiled and got up slowly, hand still jammed to crotch, so that she could sit on Luz. Luz opened up her legs and motioned for Amity to sit on her left thigh. Amity sat down, Luz's left thigh was in between Amity's two legs. Then, Luz hugged her, pulling her in closer so that she was closer to her core. "Y- You can continue rocking back and forth now." Luz whispered in Amity's ear. She said it with so much desire in her voice it was driving Amity crazy. So Amity started to rock back and forth on Luz's left thigh. Oh Titan I have to pee badly, Amity thought. She started grinding her crotch on Luz's thigh and it felt good. Amity let out a small moan and saw Luz looking at her with a devilish smile moments later. Amity smiled back and whispered, "I have to pee so badly Luz." into her ear. "I'm enjoying this so much Amity, I would like you to continue holding." Luz replied. Amity smiled back at Luz, "Ok, I will hold it, just for you." Amity added a wink at the end. She was happy to see Luz blush in response. A wave of desperation washed over Amity as she heard the sound of a waterfall from the CB. It was some Azura was doing some river side fight scene, but neither girls were really paying attention. Both of them enjoyed this a more than they enjoyed Azura. Amity instinctively clamped her legs together, forgetting that Luz's thigh was in the way. Her sphincter quivered at being unable to close her legs. "Ooooh!" Amity moaned. She was pressing her crotch down hard onto Luz. Luz felt the pressure of Amity's squeezing, both from trying to clamp her legs together, and from her pressing her crotch down so hard. She was rocking back and forth rhythmically. She smiled while she imagined that the pressure that Amity was currently exerting onto her thigh was proportional to how badly she had to pee. And judging by how much pressure Amity was exerting, she had to pee really reeeeally badly. Naturally, with Luz's thigh in the way, Amity's legs were forced to spread apart to a certain degree. "I don't know how much longer I can hold it Luz." Amity stated. "I can feel my peehole throbbing and it feels like my pee is right on the edgggge." Amity whined. "Don't go Amity, not yet. I'll let you go soon, but I want you to be strong and hold it just a little bit longer" Luz requested. Luz heard Amity continue to moan as she continued to increase the pressure. She clamped her legs around Luz's thigh even harder, and she was grinding down her crotch with so much force and friction now. She was squeezing her legs tighter and tighter that Luz began to feel some pins and needles in her leg. "Amity, you can pee now." Luz stated. Amity let out a big moan right before hissing could be heard. Seconds later, Luz felt a warm liquid spread on her pants. Right, she forgot they were still in their school uniforms. Luz relished the feeling of the warm liquid spreading out from her thigh. Some of the liquid started to spread to her own crotch too, which was already wet and sticky, but not from pee. "Ahhhhhhh", a big sigh of relief came out of Amity's mouth as she was voiding her bladder onto Luz. The pee that was gushing out of Amity felt like a mini jacuzzi jet spraying directly on Luz's thigh. Luz whimpered in ecstasy as she felt Amity's warm pee fall down the leg of her pants. She was initially embarrassed by the squeak her mouth made, but then she noticed the smirk on Amity's face as she stared at her and decided that she was ok with expressing herself like this. The warm liquid pooled on the chair that she was sitting in, soaking her bum, until the puddle reached the edge of the chair. It began as a dribbling, pitter-patter sound as it formed a puddle on the floor too. Feeling Amity's warm pee all over her legs, bum, and crotch area was giving Luz all sorts of feelings. She looked at Amity's face and saw how much she was enjoying it too. Her face was so close, she leaned slight forward. Amity saw Luz's face too, and she closed what little distance was left between them and gave her a kiss. And Luz kissed back. And they started passionately kissing each other. They were sucking each other's mouth with so much desire. Eventually, Amity's stream died down. The source of warmth on Luz's pants started to cool down, and then it got cold. "Oh gosh, we made quite a mess." Luz said once she finally took a look around and processed what just happened. Amity giggled and replied with "I don't care, let's just enjoy the moment now and deal with the consequences later." Luz looked at Amity with a smile and replied, "I never thought I'd hear those words come out of your mouth little miss perfect." Both girls giggled and then continued to kiss again, not worrying about what would happen next. THE END --- A/N: Surprise! I decided to add an epilogue chapter to "All Day at Hexside". This one is based off of the smut scene from Satyr's "All Day" fic. I decided to make a separate post for this one, because I want the original "All Day at Hexside" to be a plausibly canon complaint story that takes place between "Understanding Willow" and "Enchanting Grom Fright". But Satyr's smut scene was too good not to write a Lumity parody of, so I decided to make one and post it as a separate topic instead. Hope you enjoyed it anyways if you decided to read this! Thank you to mourn365 for beta reading this fic!
  20. Maybe I should start recording my own stories and sources of inspiration better cause it's very likely that I'm just misremembering something lol. Most of my stories are just spontaneous ideas, and then I spend a few days writing it. And there is no need for you to apologize for my own disorganized methods of keeping track of things (or lack thereof). I greatly appreciate that you're even taking the time to discuss and debunk some theories that had. It made me realize that I need to organize my stuff better lol. Cause even if there are still contradictions in my head, at the end of the day, that's on me for not being organized and keeping good records of these sorts of things. Thank you for giving me some insight into your writing process. It'll take some effort for me to build that habit, but I greatly value tips from seasoned writers such as yourself! I may never know the answer to this particular mystery, but I can take steps to ensure it won't happen again in the future!
  21. Ah, so I'm pretty much back at square one in terms of my confusion lol. I don't keep myself nearly as organized as you do. I'm just relying on the timestamps on this website (and my writing app) to be accurate. There's two other reasonable explanations I can think of (and if anyone else can think of more, please share): 1. My story wasn't actually inspired by anything. I wrote mine, posted it, then read yours 2 weeks later and thought it was so good that years later I misremembered it as my source of inspiration lol. Though at the time, I remember writing my stories primarily based off of inspiration from other stories, I wrote a few stories based off of MoringMark's comics at that time. 2. I'm misremembering my source of inspiration. Maybe there was another story posted a month or two before mine that inspired me and that was the actual source of inspiration. If anyone can also remember a story similar to what I described, please share!
  22. I'm glad this weird experience has given you some good ideas for some sci-fi stories! I'm also a big sci-fi nerd myself, but I respect that you probably don't want anyone to link your Omo writing account with your sci-fi writing account. I guess it might be possible that another story before yours inspired me, but I tried skimming through several of the fiction stories posted here within several months before I wrote mine (I only checked the ones where the title and tags were plausibly the story I was looking for) and yours was the one that matched the closest (by a lot) to the one I remember being the source of inspiration. So even though it's extremely weird for me to make that call given how the timeline doesn't add up, I decided that I'm just going to say that you're story was the one that inspired mine, suspend my disbelief for the contradiction, and move on with my life lol. Although, for my own sanity, I think I'll just pretend that this... ...was the cause of it, even though I was unable to find any evidence of it being true in this case (though I didn't look very hard for it either) Though clearly, my memory could be a factor cause I was getting details of my own story mixed up with yours lol. You're a great writer Jill and I love reading your stories! Thanks for inspiring me, and I hope this experience has inspired you to make some awesome sci-fi fics as well!
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