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  1. I echo the other comments here - a well-written story (from the point of view of convincing characters, realistic reactions etc) is far more important than the exact type of content. Reading various stories here, I’ve come to realise that I have a very narrow set of topics that are my top preference and are always present in my own fantasies, but so narrow that there’s hardly ever a story posted here that precisely matches them. But a well written story will entice me away to enjoy things that I don’t consider my true preference. To the case in point for your question: for me, desperation should always end in a wetting (and the character should enjoy it), but if you have built up a character who doesn’t think that way, then it’s just going to sound wrong if you tack on an ending to suit me - much better to write the ending that suits the character and situation. If I really want to, I can imagine the alternative ending myself, but much more often I will enjoy the story for what it is. And of course I’m in no position to tell you what to do - readers here owe a huge debt of gratitude to those who make the effort to write and post, so you should write what makes you happy.
  2. Well, that's kind of a two-way street: the more coverage they get, the more chance we have to grow to like them. So if you'd asked this question a few chapters ago it would have to be Mary-Ann because it was really her story. But then Karenna's character got more developed and right now she's my favourite: her life is more complicated and really shows her character as she tries to deal with what life throws at her, while Mary-Ann is now in an easy groove - nice boyfriend, able to indulge her fetish at will, loyal staff all do what she tells them, no real challenge. But who knows, maybe Mary-Ann will make a comeback. I don't think Cassie will ever be my favourite, though that doesn't mean she deserves less screen-time as her story is beginning to get interesting.
  3. It seemed unlikely that Karenna/Cassie would have gone from being rude to each other to all friendly in such a short space of time, so some kind of dispute was called for; the "shut up" did seem rather abrupt, but I put that down to Karenna's judgement being impaired by her desperate need to pee, so it was actually good. Mary-Ann/Tyler feels like she hasn't really "fallen for" him yet, but the potential is there. Nothing wrong with Anna's scenes, and an interesting twist, but I do wonder how you are going to make her fit in. Will she be upset if she discovers that Mary-Ann enjoys it which devalues the gesture she apparently made in support of Anna. Not to mention finding a bunch of people who enjoy the thing that makes her life miserable. Very tricky to write a nice outcome - but I am sure you can do it!
  4. My reaction to this sort of question is that you should write whatever fires your imagination rather than artificially inserting scenes to suit other people - the result is likely to be of higher quality, and if it doesn't happen to match my tastes, that's my problem not yours; it will probably suit someone else instead. I find that I can enjoy a poorly-written story only if it's exactly matching my taste, but well-written stories I can enjoy over a much wider range - to an extent, the quality of the story matters more than the content. But as it happens, the current rate of omo suits my taste - what counts for me is new unique scenarios rather than the total number of scenes, and that often takes a bit of setup to get there.
  5. OK! So we still don't know Cassie's story, but enough hints to know that there's a story to be told and more insight into her character. All good stuff. Meantime Sarah is being lined up as the villain.
  6. Hmm! It was just a feeling, but now you're making me analyse it.... I think it's because she's being rude and disrespectful to the other characters (who we've already come to know and like), but without any purpose: it's not because she's engaged in some evil plot, she's not a total slacker who never does any work for anybody, she's not doing it because she's ultra-competitive, maybe she thinks she's better than Karenna but if so we've not been given any reason why she should think that way; conversely she's not resenting others for being better than her. Essentially she's just got this nasty attitude and no reason for it. But as I say, it's early days and the reason may become clear - or her attitude may soften and she comes to respect the others (or she gets fired...). Or maybe I'm grumbling over nothing and the story needs an annoying character for contrast with the likeable ones. Certainly trust your own judgement over mine - I wouldn't have dreamed of commenting if you hadn't asked the question!
  7. I think Cassie is bordering on being annoying, but I have faith that you made her this way for a reason - that she's leading up to a "bad girl made good" storyline, or going the other way turning into a villain that we will love to hate, or some other twist I haven't thought of. She's only just appeared in the story, too early to make judgement yet. And I agree with everyone else that Karenna's situation is very well written - we feel for her in making difficult choices.
  8. Good to see that their traumatic experience in the field hasn't put them off the things they enjoy. Probably a wise move skipping the timeline on a bit, but there's a slight continuity error: 5 months from start of lockdown on 20th March would take it to 20th August and they'd be on summer holidays. So I'm assuming it's more like 3.5-4 months and they are near the end of the summer term. Not that it really matters of course. I'd love to hear Rosie's reaction to finding out that Lula was actually peeing when the teacher told her off for yawning, but I'm not sure if Lula is going to tell her. I'm also itching to find out more about Sakura - I'm sure she's more into this than she has admitted so far. That comment about "I need to pee, what would you do?" was really trying to lead Rosie on, before the plot veered off in another direction. Still, we've learned with this story that good things come to those who wait! Many thanks for your continued work on this.
  9. Because we were too excited to get a couple of new chapters in a few days? I did think when I read the first one that you were being bold keeping the story in contemporary real time - it might have been easier to take the story off into a parallel universe where COVID never happened. But by the time I was reading the second chapter I'd forgotten and didn't notice the error (and reading it again, it could just as well have been Lula & Rosie having forgotten that school was off).
  10. Of course we understand if you don't have the time or motivation to write, but never think it's not wanted. We want more Lula!
  11. Amber is bound to ask Chloe if she made it, and there's Amber's own story to be revealed. Not to mention that dodgy zipper which is bound to cause trouble at some point... Really looking forward to how this all plays out.
  12. A really good set of stories - I missed them the first time around as they were tagged male desperation and that isn't my thing, but in fact so well written that even the male ones were worth a read. I particularly liked the little twist in the tale at the end of many of the stories - my favourite being February where we hear at the beginning of Fred's friendly offer to call in case of trouble, then at the end we learn what sort of trouble he is really hoping for.
  13. Excellent stuff. You had me going with the first couple of paragraphs - silk curtain and smell of apples? That's odd inside a car? Oh, the story's moved on to another scene - damn, I was really looking forward to how the car journey worked out. Oh, it is still the story inside the car! I do like stories like this where everybody's in the same (desperate/wet) situation, yet the each have their own way of looking at it.
  14. The fans will be anxiously waiting for the prequel, the spin-off miniseries etc. Not sure about the merchandising opportunities... Much enjoying the story so far.
  15. Many thanks for taking the trouble to make your story available to those of us who can't read Dutch. I certainly enjoyed it! I could only spot three very minor errors in the english, two of which look like spell-checker damage: you wrote "stared at her in disbelieve" when you meant "in disbelief", and you wrote "for a few instances" when you meant "for a few instants". Finally, "she didn’t have the slightest perspective to reach toilet facilities" should probably be "she didn't have the slightest prospect of reaching toilet facilities". looking forward to the next time you feel in need of some translation practice...
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