cudi 27 Posted February 18, 2019 Popular Post Share Posted February 18, 2019 #female #pee desperation #just in time #barely make it Hello Everyone, this is my first short story on this forum. I read many stories here and on my "country internet". This is a real pee desperation short story I found on one forum with real life experiences, modified by me . Heroine is a 16-18 years old girl from eastern europe. If You will approve it, I will post here more stories based of real ones (found or heard by me, or my personal experiences). I can not pee "outside". Restrooms that are acceptable, except "home" ones, are for me in galleries, at gas stations (of course, after proper lining with toilet paper). Buses, trains - no way. I'll rather block myself for 12 hours and the end. Outside? There is no option. I can not. I'm scared that I'll pee all over my butt and my shoes. It happened, when I tried last time, few years ago. I have not tried it for years. By the time.The situation took place a one year ago. I met a male friend from primary school, drank a few beers, time to go home. I had to travel from Capital city to my Home town. Night almost dark, train was almost empty. Home so close and far at the same time. I am halfway, and I already feel that the fluid I have consumed wants to leave my body. I think: a few more stops, but I can do it. I can hold it. In the meantime, I called my brother and I asked him to come to the station for me. He was chilling with friend and did not want to at the beginning, but I begged him and he agreed to come picked me up from train platform. My need to empty overflowing bladder increased in every minute. Lock for a few minutes and I may get stuck, but I will not get home, no whip. I'm not going to pee outside, I can not.In the open field train suddenly stops. A conductress lady goes through the whole vehicle and says that we are in ... in the middle of nowhere and because of some failure we will have a small delay and we have to stand here for a while. Of course, not their fault, they apologize. OKAY...A few minutes passed, I started to get nervous, I got up (after all, you have more space standing up, no pressure and there is no such pressure on the bladder - do not ask about logic.) I never had it after alcohol).I walked around the vehicle in search of the toilet - of course only one was broken (*it was short train, designed for short distances- it had only 3 carriages) .Next minutes. I think: I can not do it. I begin to slowly look around for a place without people. It's hard. I peep up somewhere in the corner. Shame as hell, but there is no way out. Certainly I will not wet myself (last time I did it as 9 yo, I was to busy to pee in school and I emptied my bladder in front of my bathroom doors after very long struggle). In the worst case, I will wee in bush during this unplanned stop.Salvation comes in the form of train movement - we are well on our way to reaching home. I clenched my legs, I braced myself - now I have a chance to hold it.The brother gives a sign that he is already waiting. With his colleague (and my crush at this time). I felt relief and stress at the same time. I can not admit tchem that I need a piss so bad. It is embarassing!I arrive sore in place. I run out of the train. I run through a long staircase. FUCK! I can not make it. I felt first short spurt escaped and landed in my panties. I said to my brother and his friend: -Hi, I have to go, give me a moment.. I didn't even wait for they response. I saw a tree. Big. Spreading. Dark. No people. Perfect. I reach the tree, I tried to undo my back zipper (after alcohoI do not recommend trousers with a zip at the back - a terrible thing), but no success. I tried to move it back and forward, but still no success. I felt second spurt escaped… it was bigger than first one. I felt wetness. Third attempt. I moved it back and forward and.... It worked! I squat and piss .... My Gosh, what a relief. I peed for about a minute before the stream Begin to weak. When I peed the last drops, I found out that I don't have a tissues.. But I decided to avoid more embarassment and shaked my butt and check the damage. It was not as bad as I thougt: panties were wet on the front and little on the back, but on my jeans nothing was visible. Maybe small patch, but jeans were dark blue. I put on all my clothes, and said "Sorry" to my brother and his friend and we got in the car. I thought my brother will laugh of me about it, but he did not say anything about my "race to the bushes". Bismiris, Mrgala21, spamuser563 and 4 others 7 Quote Link to comment
pguy69 497 Posted March 1, 2019 Share Posted March 1, 2019 I'd love to hear more from you. Thanks for sharing! cudi and verint 2 Quote Link to comment
Eli 0 Posted March 2, 2019 Share Posted March 2, 2019 Very nice, would love to see more. Quote Link to comment
RagingPython 241 Posted March 3, 2019 Share Posted March 3, 2019 It’s okay. The lack of a name for the protagonist puts me off, something so simple and minor is surprisingly important, and the story was basically none existent. There was little backstory for why the character had to go and it didn’t spend long enough on her desperation for me. The text is too big too, and it’s not long enough for my liking. But I’m unusual in that aspect, I “long” stories with characters and names where omo takes a backseat for significant sections of the story. facade 1 Quote Link to comment
pguy69 497 Posted March 3, 2019 Share Posted March 3, 2019 5 hours ago, RagingPython said: It’s okay. The lack of a name for the protagonist puts me off, something so simple and minor is surprisingly important, and the story was basically none existent. There was little backstory for why the character had to go and it didn’t spend long enough on her desperation for me. The text is too big too, and it’s not long enough for my liking. But I’m unusual in that aspect, I “long” stories with characters and names where omo takes a backseat for significant sections of the story. Way to encourage a new member to post again! It's really daunting joining a site like this, and to actually bit the bullet and post, rather than just being a lurker, takes bottle. It is also clear that English is not their first language. Is it perfect, no, but for a first post, I, for one, am keen to see more. Ripping it apart can do nothing but put them off posting again. Jeez, if you've got nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all. There is plenty on this forum that does nothing for me, but I don't comment all of it telling people that! verint, Sake and facade 1 2 Quote Link to comment
Sake 340 Posted March 3, 2019 Share Posted March 3, 2019 3 minutes ago, pguy69 said: Way to encourage a new member to post again! It's really daunting joining a site like this, and to actually bit the bullet and post, rather than just being a lurker, takes bottle. It is also clear that English is not their first language. Is it perfect, no, but for a first post, I, for one, am keen to see more. Ripping it apart can do nothing but put them off posting again. Jeez, if you've got nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all. There is plenty on this forum that does nothing for me, but I don't comment all of it telling people that! This sort of attitude is what makes it harder for artists and writers to improve. Nobody's going to be perfect, and if you're going to put something out you'd damn well better expect people to point out how it's not perfect, and you'd also damn well better listen when people tell you what you can improve. There's nothing wrong with respectful criticism, and the thing to which you responded is very good, very respectful, and very valid criticism. To discourage criticism is to discourage improvement. Nobody will know how to improve if nobody tells them what they're doing wrong. And, honestly, if you ask me, if someone can't take criticism, they shouldn't be posting art in the first place. Any artist knows that what they're posting isn't perfect, that people will have problems with it, and that they will point out those problems; in fact, if they have any intention of being a real artist, that's exactly what they want. To reject that is to reject the single best means to improve one's skills. And, sure, there is a bad way to criticize, but that's not it. Bad criticism is saying "this sucks" without any elaboration or any explanation on how to make it not suck. Bad criticism is also refusing to give criticism in the first place because pointing out issues isn't nice. Of course it's not nice. But being nice doesn't help. "Is it perfect, no" doesn't help anyone because you haven't explained why it isn't perfect and how it could be closer to perfect. If the artist doesn't like the criticism, that's one thing. It's an entirely different thing when people flat out don't give criticism and actively discourage others from doing so. That is the biggest obstacle to improvement, that nobody wants anyone to point out what's wrong with something. Point out the problems, artist acknowledges and fixes the problems, artist improves. That's how it works. spamuser563 and facade 2 Quote Link to comment
RagingPython 241 Posted March 3, 2019 Share Posted March 3, 2019 4 hours ago, pguy69 said: Way to encourage a new member to post again! It's really daunting joining a site like this, and to actually bit the bullet and post, rather than just being a lurker, takes bottle. It is also clear that English is not their first language. Is it perfect, no, but for a first post, I, for one, am keen to see more. Ripping it apart can do nothing but put them off posting again. Jeez, if you've got nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all. There is plenty on this forum that does nothing for me, but I don't comment all of it telling people that! I gave advice to them in addition. I didn’t notice English wasn’t their first language at all to be honest. Ripping it apart can do more than just put them off posting. I personally wish people would make comments like mine on my fan fiction so I know how to improve. The “if you’ve got nothing nice to say, don’t say anything at all” works when talking to people, but not when you are receiving a story, what the writer wants is constructive criticism like I commented. 4 hours ago, Sake said: This sort of attitude is what makes it harder for artists and writers to improve. Nobody's going to be perfect, and if you're going to put something out you'd damn well better expect people to point out how it's not perfect, and you'd also damn well better listen when people tell you what you can improve. There's nothing wrong with respectful criticism, and the thing to which you responded is very good, very respectful, and very valid criticism. To discourage criticism is to discourage improvement. Nobody will know how to improve if nobody tells them what they're doing wrong. And, honestly, if you ask me, if someone can't take criticism, they shouldn't be posting art in the first place. Any artist knows that what they're posting isn't perfect, that people will have problems with it, and that they will point out those problems; in fact, if they have any intention of being a real artist, that's exactly what they want. To reject that is to reject the single best means to improve one's skills. And, sure, there is a bad way to criticize, but that's not it. Bad criticism is saying "this sucks" without any elaboration or any explanation on how to make it not suck. Bad criticism is also refusing to give criticism in the first place because pointing out issues isn't nice. Of course it's not nice. But being nice doesn't help. "Is it perfect, no" doesn't help anyone because you haven't explained why it isn't perfect and how it could be closer to perfect. If the artist doesn't like the criticism, that's one thing. It's an entirely different thing when people flat out don't give criticism and actively discourage others from doing so. That is the biggest obstacle to improvement, that nobody wants anyone to point out what's wrong with something. Point out the problems, artist acknowledges and fixes the problems, artist improves. That's how it works. Exactly. Sake 1 Quote Link to comment
facade 1,947 Posted March 3, 2019 Share Posted March 3, 2019 5 hours ago, pguy69 said: Way to encourage a new member to post again! It's really daunting joining a site like this, and to actually bit the bullet and post, rather than just being a lurker, takes bottle. It is also clear that English is not their first language. Is it perfect, no, but for a first post, I, for one, am keen to see more. Ripping it apart can do nothing but put them off posting again. Jeez, if you've got nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all. There is plenty on this forum that does nothing for me, but I don't comment all of it telling people that! To be honest, it's comments like yours that I find unproductive and a bit of an eyesore to read. I strongly prefer reading comments with criticism and feedback on stories that I post here. "I'd love to hear more from you. Thanks for sharing!" is boring and tells people almost nothing about why you enjoyed their story, what they can improve on and what they are doing great on. Writers live for this kind of thing and in my opinion if you have nothing constructive to say, don't say anything at all. FullBladder85 and Sake 2 Quote Link to comment
pguy69 497 Posted March 6, 2019 Share Posted March 6, 2019 I personally don't think that first time posters on a website, sharing experiences regarding a fetish such as omorashi, have any intention of ever being an artist. For a lot of people it would take a lot of courage to even join such a site, let alone post an experience, or a fiction. The poster didn't ask for opinions, or feedback, they merely stated that if we approve, they will post more stories and experiences. I am firmly of the opinion that a first time poster should be encouraged and made to feel welcome, to encourage future posts. I'm sure they are not pursuing a career in literature, rather just exploring an often demonised fetish with like minded people. My initial post may well have been boring, but it was intended to be encouraging. I know when I posted my first fiction on here, I appreciated every single person that told me they liked it. It really encouraged me to write and share more. That's all I was trying to achieve. cudi 1 Quote Link to comment
Dimwitrolo 3,018 Posted March 6, 2019 Share Posted March 6, 2019 On 3/3/2019 at 3:45 PM, pguy69 said: Way to encourage a new member to post again! It's really daunting joining a site like this, and to actually bit the bullet and post, rather than just being a lurker, takes bottle. It is also clear that English is not their first language. Is it perfect, no, but for a first post, I, for one, am keen to see more. Ripping it apart can do nothing but put them off posting again. Jeez, if you've got nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all. There is plenty on this forum that does nothing for me, but I don't comment all of it telling people that! As an artist and writer myself, I can't think of anything more valuable than criticism. facade and Sake 2 Quote Link to comment
Sake 340 Posted March 6, 2019 Share Posted March 6, 2019 2 hours ago, pguy69 said: The poster didn't ask for opinions, or feedback Criticism doesn't require permission... 2 hours ago, pguy69 said: they merely stated that if we approve, they will post more stories and experiences. ... nor does it mean the critic is automatically trying to imply the work is terrible. 2 hours ago, pguy69 said: I'm sure they are not pursuing a career in literature Surprisingly, people other than professionals are capable of improving. 2 hours ago, pguy69 said: rather just exploring an often demonised fetish with like minded people. And indeed, the relative lack of content of this particular type - especially good content - means constructive criticism is even more valuable than it otherwise would be. It means good content stands out more than average or mediocre content and ultimately gets more attention. The story posted in this thread is decidedly average. And that's fine, because advice on how to improve was already provided. 2 hours ago, pguy69 said: I appreciated every single person that told me they liked it. It really encouraged me to write and share more. And that's great, but ultimately it doesn't accomplish anything. It's not really helpful. Sure, it might end up in more content being produced, but that's not necessarily a good thing unless quality actively improves over time. Quality over quantity, every time. More than that, though, if the writer has an issue with people giving criticism, they can come out themselves and explain why they don't like the criticism that's being given. They don't need you running around being their white knight. Because you know what? If you're gonna put something out for other people to see, you already know it's going to be criticized whether you want it to be or not, and what makes your work art is the ability to take that criticism and improve. And if you're not going to do that, then it's really not worth anyone else's time to bother with what you put out if it's never going to get any better, which ultimately just wastes your time too because you're putting stuff out nobody has an interest in. Anybody who actually has an interest in writing and actually wants to share more will take and use constructive criticism. That's how art works. Dimwitrolo and facade 2 Quote Link to comment
RagingPython 241 Posted March 7, 2019 Share Posted March 7, 2019 4 hours ago, pguy69 said: I personally don't think that first time posters on a website, sharing experiences regarding a fetish such as omorashi, have any intention of ever being an artist. For a lot of people it would take a lot of courage to even join such a site, let alone post an experience, or a fiction. The poster didn't ask for opinions, or feedback, they merely stated that if we approve, they will post more stories and experiences. I am firmly of the opinion that a first time poster should be encouraged and made to feel welcome, to encourage future posts. I'm sure they are not pursuing a career in literature, rather just exploring an often demonised fetish with like minded people. My initial post may well have been boring, but it was intended to be encouraging. I know when I posted my first fiction on here, I appreciated every single person that told me they liked it. It really encouraged me to write and share more. That's all I was trying to achieve. Now I’ll admit, I didn’t sign up here to be an artist, I signed up here to post the stories I created so that others could enjoy them. But by doing this, it allows me to improve my skills so that both me and my followers can benefit from my improved skills. That and writing is just great fun in general. The positive comments I’ve received are lovely, but I’d love it if I received some more criticism as I know my writing isn’t perfect. 1 hour ago, Sake said: Criticism doesn't require permission... ... nor does it mean the critic is automatically trying to imply the work is terrible. Surprisingly, people other than professionals are capable of improving. And indeed, the relative lack of content of this particular type - especially good content - means constructive criticism is even more valuable than it otherwise would be. It means good content stands out more than average or mediocre content and ultimately gets more attention. The story posted in this thread is decidedly average. And that's fine, because advice on how to improve was already provided. And that's great, but ultimately it doesn't accomplish anything. It's not really helpful. Sure, it might end up in more content being produced, but that's not necessarily a good thing unless quality actively improves over time. Quality over quantity, every time. More than that, though, if the writer has an issue with people giving criticism, they can come out themselves and explain why they don't like the criticism that's being given. They don't need you running around being their white knight. Because you know what? If you're gonna put something out for other people to see, you already know it's going to be criticized whether you want it to be or not, and what makes your work art is the ability to take that criticism and improve. And if you're not going to do that, then it's really not worth anyone else's time to bother with what you put out if it's never going to get any better, which ultimately just wastes your time too because you're putting stuff out nobody has an interest in. Anybody who actually has an interest in writing and actually wants to share more will take and use constructive criticism. That's how art works. Brilliant post Sake 1 Quote Link to comment
cudi 27 Posted March 9, 2019 Author Share Posted March 9, 2019 pguy69 and Eli, thank You for Your support:) ! I really appreciate it:) To all critics, thank You for your comments. I will do my best to avoid simple language mistakes next time (I am not native speaker as You probably know ) and I will altry to improve my writing skills:) Thanksf for feedback:)! I will write and upload my next story soon (based on real experience and more "rare" :) ) pguy69 1 Quote Link to comment
spamuser563 1 Posted May 26, 2019 Share Posted May 26, 2019 I'm glad that some people in the world agree with my thoughts on criticism, I was known as a "savage" in middle school because of the nerve I had to criticize people, but it is the only way the world makes progress. I have always hated the saying "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all" because if we only say nice things to people, they will never know how we truly feel. And what this ultimately leads to is us hiding and stuffing down what we really feel, which will probably come out as gossip later or as anger towards people you live with. I openly criticize my friends and I let them do the same to me, that way I can be myself around them and vise-versa. Even though I have less friends because of it, the quality of the friendships have been better than every friendship that people who hide their true feelings to get more friends combined. In my opinion, criticism and change is the only way mankind can progress in anyway, including something as simple as these stories. Quote Link to comment
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