wedgeantilles 156 Posted June 5, 2019 Share Posted June 5, 2019 What an awesome story, just amazing! But I think (maybe it is just wishfull thinking) that Katherine has made a mistake: Her bladder was still aching, and she was sure that if she remained squatting she would be able to force more spurts of pee out, but she knew she could probably hold it till they reached Tantallon. She should have taken some more time to be completly empty. All of their bladder will refill very fast - and they can't have any strength left to start a new hold. Personally I'd love if Katherine would loose control of her bladder before they reach the city. Maybe in front of the King? It would be horribly humilating and I am sure she would be devastated. But I am equally sure that the king would be very understanding and she would feel better soon. Maybe it could be the start of a beautiful relationship? Pain, Rexone_312 and Thispieguy1 2 1 Quote Link to comment
jimpix123 27 Posted June 6, 2019 Share Posted June 6, 2019 oh hell yea this was worth the wait (no pun intended), i already nut like 4 times and i'm only halfway through lmaoo Thispieguy1 and Pain 2 Quote Link to comment
Sake 340 Posted June 6, 2019 Share Posted June 6, 2019 I like where this is going. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Melificentfan 1,215 Posted June 7, 2019 ✨ Legendary Member Share Posted June 7, 2019 That was fantastic I cant wait to read the next part Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Pain 927 Posted June 8, 2019 Author Share Posted June 8, 2019 Thank you so much all for the lovely comments!! I am really grateful that you all took out the time to read!! Thank you so much! And also if there are any suggestions or criticisms that you'd like to share then I'll be really happy to know about them! Thank you once again for the comments guys! It really means a lot 😇 Quote Link to comment
Sake 340 Posted June 8, 2019 Share Posted June 8, 2019 2 hours ago, Pain said: And also if there are any suggestions or criticisms that you'd like to share then I'll be really happy to know about them! Mostly I would just suggest that you get yourself a proofreader. I hear someone around here will proofread for free. It's written extremely well but having someone else look it over before you publish a chapter is always useful to see if there's anything you didn't catch yourself. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Pain 927 Posted June 9, 2019 Author Share Posted June 9, 2019 22 hours ago, Sake said: Mostly I would just suggest that you get yourself a proofreader. I hear someone around here will proofread for free. It's written extremely well but having someone else look it over before you publish a chapter is always useful to see if there's anything you didn't catch yourself. Sure! Thank you so much for the suggestion! P. S. - Sorry if I sound dumb but could you please tell me who you are pointing to in this statement, "I hear someone around here will proofread for free." Would that be you? Quote Link to comment
Sake 340 Posted June 9, 2019 Share Posted June 9, 2019 1 hour ago, Pain said: Would that be you? Yes. If you'd like you can just shoot whatever you'd want me to look at over in my general direction and I'll do what I can to it. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Pain 927 Posted June 10, 2019 Author Share Posted June 10, 2019 22 hours ago, Sake said: Yes. If you'd like you can just shoot whatever you'd want me to look at over in my general direction and I'll do what I can to it. Sure! Thank you so much! I definitely will😊 Quote Link to comment
gfaroank 18 Posted June 10, 2019 Share Posted June 10, 2019 It's one of the most perfect stories I've ever seen, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Pain 927 Posted June 11, 2019 Author Share Posted June 11, 2019 (edited) 21 hours ago, gfaroank said: It's one of the most perfect stories I've ever seen, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks a ton! That really means a lot to me! I will definitely start working on the next chapter as soon as I can. P.S.- I really am looking for some ideas for the coming chapters so would be glad to know if anyone has anything to suggest. Please feel free to message me or put it in the comments in case anyone has anything to contribute. Edited June 11, 2019 by Pain (see edit history) Quote Link to comment
jimpix123 27 Posted June 11, 2019 Share Posted June 11, 2019 Man honestly I think you need to conclude the Queen's desperation. Let her piss in the privy. Be detailed. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
wedgeantilles 156 Posted June 11, 2019 Share Posted June 11, 2019 Like I already said, I'd enjoy it if Katherine will loose control. I like strong woman who just reach the point where they can't keep it in any longer. And since I got the feeling Katherine hasn't relieved herself to 100% it seems plausible: Her sphincter has to be weakened - and a full bladder refills quite fast after a long hold. The king is into wetting and I see so much potential here. Her humiliation of wetting herself must be horrible, especiall in front of the king. And if he responds kindly, who know where this could lead to? Maybe you want to make another story about those two in the future. You have possibilities to go anyway you may want to. Maybe stuff you don't think of at the moment. Charlotte should definitly pee now. She has been described as totally full and she had several situations where she admitted that she can't hold it any longer. She found the strength to hold it longer (or was forced to find this strength, because circumstances just prohibited her to urinate) - that was awesome. But if this continues any longer it makes her desperation ad absurdum. How desperate can you truely be, if you can hold it longer, longer, longer, another day and another and another? IMO she must have reached the point in which holding is just not possible anymore. She has to pee, no matter if in privacy in the privy, behind a bush or even in her clothes. Pain and huberp76 2 Quote Link to comment
NotDusty 182 Posted June 11, 2019 Share Posted June 11, 2019 In agreement with a couple of others, I think Katherine should lose control on the way back to the city. I think after the nine day ordeal that Queen Charlotte has been through, she should be allowed to use the loo in peace (though not without a little further suffering 😉). Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
warham1995 1,016 Posted June 11, 2019 Share Posted June 11, 2019 i think that as charlotte pee dances in front of the privy,one of the maids would try and take her to a secret place where she would be able to pee without farlen finding out. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
warham1995 1,016 Posted June 12, 2019 Share Posted June 12, 2019 (edited) 6 hours ago, warham1995 said: 6 hours ago, warham1995 said: i think that as charlotte pee dances in front of the privy,one of the maids who also has to pee would try and take her to a secret place where she would be able to pee without farlen finding out. Edited June 12, 2019 by warham1995 (see edit history) Quote Link to comment
Hankjones1738 11 Posted June 12, 2019 Share Posted June 12, 2019 I like the idea of one of them wetting the bed and trying poorly to hid their wet sheets/undercloth but getting caught in the act by Farlen and failing to convince him that its not what I looks like. Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Bombality 2,907 Posted June 13, 2019 Share Posted June 13, 2019 (edited) My idea of King Iwan before this chapter My idea of King Iwan after this chapter I loved this chapter, I had to return multiple times because I was getting too "excited" from it multiple times. I don't have any ideas though, but what I liked the most of this chapter (along with a badass king) is finding that there are other girls in the kingdoms that can hold until looking pregnant, I wonder if there is someone somewhere that has an even bigger bladder than Queen Charlotte herself. Edited June 13, 2019 by Bombality (see edit history) ar ar ar and Pain 2 Quote Link to comment
Frooger 98 Posted June 14, 2019 Share Posted June 14, 2019 I don't think Queen Charlotte should be allowed to pee yet, s'urly she can hold it some more days? Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
HoldingPrinces 567 Posted June 16, 2019 Share Posted June 16, 2019 I was waiting around 2 months for this chapter and finally it's here. Chapter is so marvellous and it's worth waiting so much for it. But I prefer if Catherine and other girls were in custody for few more days and hence they had to hold for all these days, just for the sake of their pride of being royal ledies. And also the king could have been much strict and not have allowed the girls to pee outside, so that they will have to hold until they reach back to the Palace. Catherine seems to be growing upto be a real bladder queen and Charlotte could be really proud of her future daughter in law. I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter. Pain and huberp76 2 Quote Link to comment
Bombality 2,907 Posted June 25, 2019 Share Posted June 25, 2019 (edited) I am starting a drawing of Queen Charlotte soon, however I am struggling with ideas as my original plan was to draw the point right before she wet herself or made it to the privy as to draw her in her most desperate possible but she is still holding. What would help me is things like what would you want to see, how big I should make the bladder, what scene of the ones described. If you want you can even check how I drew her in my style (page 4 of this thread) and if I should change something to it. (I have permission from Pain to post this here so it's not spam) Edited June 25, 2019 by Bombality (see edit history) Pain 1 Quote Link to comment
Pain 927 Posted June 26, 2019 Author Share Posted June 26, 2019 On 6/11/2019 at 8:33 PM, jimpix123 said: Man honestly I think you need to conclude the Queen's desperation. Let her piss in the privy. Be detailed. I know it has been a long while since the story started and the readers have been waiting for the climax. I promise to wrap it up as soon as I can. On 6/11/2019 at 9:47 PM, wedgeantilles said: Like I already said, I'd enjoy it if Katherine will loose control. I like strong woman who just reach the point where they can't keep it in any longer. And since I got the feeling Katherine hasn't relieved herself to 100% it seems plausible: Her sphincter has to be weakened - and a full bladder refills quite fast after a long hold. The king is into wetting and I see so much potential here. Her humiliation of wetting herself must be horrible, especiall in front of the king. And if he responds kindly, who know where this could lead to? Maybe you want to make another story about those two in the future. You have possibilities to go anyway you may want to. Maybe stuff you don't think of at the moment. Charlotte should definitly pee now. She has been described as totally full and she had several situations where she admitted that she can't hold it any longer. She found the strength to hold it longer (or was forced to find this strength, because circumstances just prohibited her to urinate) - that was awesome. But if this continues any longer it makes her desperation ad absurdum. How desperate can you truely be, if you can hold it longer, longer, longer, another day and another and another? IMO she must have reached the point in which holding is just not possible anymore. She has to pee, no matter if in privacy in the privy, behind a bush or even in her clothes. I really like the Katherine idea and I will try to incorporate it in the story if possible. I know you have been telling me that I need to end Charlotte's hold now and I totally agree to it, but as I said before, there are certain plot points that are still pending to be established that I have already finished writing for the story and changing it entirely will take a shit load of time. I promise to wrap it up as soon as I can though, I know it is taxing for the readers as well but I promise it will be worth it. On 6/12/2019 at 2:30 AM, NotDusty said: In agreement with a couple of others, I think Katherine should lose control on the way back to the city. I think after the nine day ordeal that Queen Charlotte has been through, she should be allowed to use the loo in peace (though not without a little further suffering 😉). Thanks a ton for the comment! I am glad you took out the time to read! I will surely try to add the Katherine plot in the story if possible. Hope you will like that too. On 6/12/2019 at 4:44 AM, warham1995 said: i think that as charlotte pee dances in front of the privy,one of the maids would try and take her to a secret place where she would be able to pee without farlen finding out. That sounds interesting 😅 On 6/13/2019 at 1:29 AM, Hankjones1738 said: I like the idea of one of them wetting the bed and trying poorly to hid their wet sheets/undercloth but getting caught in the act by Farlen and failing to convince him that its not what I looks like. Yeah, I've always liked bed wettings. I'll surely try to put it in the story. Thank you so much for the comment! 🙂 On 6/13/2019 at 11:35 PM, Bombality said: My idea of King Iwan before this chapter My idea of King Iwan after this chapter I loved this chapter, I had to return multiple times because I was getting too "excited" from it multiple times. I don't have any ideas though, but what I liked the most of this chapter (along with a badass king) is finding that there are other girls in the kingdoms that can hold until looking pregnant, I wonder if there is someone somewhere that has an even bigger bladder than Queen Charlotte herself. Thank you so much for the positive comment Bombality! I am glad you like. And no one has a bigger bladder than the Queen, at least not right now! 😉 On 6/15/2019 at 5:12 AM, frogger4y said: I don't think Queen Charlotte should be allowed to pee yet, s'urly she can hold it some more days? Hahah! I'll keep that a secret! 🙂 On 6/16/2019 at 11:42 AM, HoldingPrinces said: I was waiting around 2 months for this chapter and finally it's here. Chapter is so marvellous and it's worth waiting so much for it. But I prefer if Catherine and other girls were in custody for few more days and hence they had to hold for all these days, just for the sake of their pride of being royal ledies. And also the king could have been much strict and not have allowed the girls to pee outside, so that they will have to hold until they reach back to the Palace. Catherine seems to be growing upto be a real bladder queen and Charlotte could be really proud of her future daughter in law. I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter. Thank you so much, my dear! 🙂 I promise to post the next chapter as soon as possible! 20 hours ago, Bombality said: I am starting a drawing of Queen Charlotte soon, however I am struggling with ideas as my original plan was to draw the point right before she wet herself or made it to the privy as to draw her in her most desperate possible but she is still holding. What would help me is things like what would you want to see, how big I should make the bladder, what scene of the ones described. If you want you can even check how I drew her in my style (page 4 of this thread) and if I should change something to it. (I have permission from Pain to post this here so it's not spam) I would love to see a picture of Farlen telling the Queen who is standing defiantly (with a very swollen bladder) that she is not allowed to use the privy yet! That would be really great to watch! Quote Link to comment
huberp76 3,803 Posted July 1, 2019 ✨ Legendary Member Share Posted July 1, 2019 Great story! I like what you write and i like the way how you write it. The boys gets aroused just to know that the girls did not pee for so long, to know that the girls are needing to go for so long and that they still has to wait hours for hours. "The girls putting off their need to piss for so long. Their bladders would just have to stretch a little more. Katherine said to Mord that they need to use the chamber pot, because they really need to.. and he did answer " that can wait". Really great to say to a girl who is full to burst, who is needing to wee more that anything else in the world, that she can wait. Quote Link to comment
huberp76 3,803 Posted July 1, 2019 ✨ Legendary Member Share Posted July 1, 2019 On 6/16/2019 at 8:12 AM, HoldingPrinces said: I was waiting around 2 months for this chapter and finally it's here. Chapter is so marvellous and it's worth waiting so much for it. But I prefer if Catherine and other girls were in custody for few more days and hence they had to hold for all these days, just for the sake of their pride of being royal ledies. And also the king could have been much strict and not have allowed the girls to pee outside, so that they will have to hold until they reach back to the Palace. Catherine seems to be growing upto be a real bladder queen and Charlotte could be really proud of her future daughter in law. I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter. Yes the king should not allowed the girls to pee outside, the girls should have to hold it until they reach back. The boys would love that. Quote Link to comment
call3x 6 Posted July 3, 2019 Share Posted July 3, 2019 i love the way you're writing this story,,, the last chapter was so amazing i re-read it a lot! can't wait for charlotte to finally relieve herself i know it's gonna be legendary Quote Link to comment
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