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Nice story! You do a really good job drawing out the desperation and expressing the internal thoughts of the characters. 

I would say that the story needs a little more background, perhaps a description of what Lisa looks like or who some of the characters are. In addition, I believe it needs more of the protagonist's physical feelings. While you do express what the character is thinking and what is happening, it doesn't contain what the character physically feels (waves of desperation, pleasure when peeing, etc.). It's pretty common stories like this, the KozmoLotto, or other top stories on the site. 

Good luck and keep up the good work!

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12 hours ago, CECA said:

Nice story! You do a really good job drawing out the desperation and expressing the internal thoughts of the characters. 

I would say that the story needs a little more background, perhaps a description of what Lisa looks like or who some of the characters are. In addition, I believe it needs more of the protagonist's physical feelings. While you do express what the character is thinking and what is happening, it doesn't contain what the character physically feels (waves of desperation, pleasure when peeing, etc.). It's pretty common stories like this, the KozmoLotto, or other top stories on the site. 

Good luck and keep up the good work!

Agreed but for the classroom site I would need to figure how to keep it G

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50 minutes ago, princesstess said:

Agreed but for the classroom site I would need to figure how to keep it G

Looks like I need to take my site down and start over as my stories really fall short....

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On 1/18/2018 at 8:43 AM, princesstess said:

Looks like I need to take my site down and start over as my stories really fall short....

I agree with nightwind. There's really no need to take down your past stories (it seemed like you put a lot of work into them). At least include them on your new website so that people can still view them if they wish. 

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