princesstess 6 Posted January 10, 2018 Share Posted January 10, 2018 Just finished a new classroom pantie pee story. Its my longest yet and has an extended desperation and pantie pee stretched over two periods and a too-long line for the girls room https://desperate-in-class.weebly.com/lisas-extended-pantie-pee.html Part two coming soon Enjoy Tess Quote Link to comment
princesstess 6 Posted January 16, 2018 Author Share Posted January 16, 2018 Have part 2 done where Cindy the Student Teacher is forced to pee her panties in her tight grey pantsuit for questioning Ms. Bryce's bathroom policy https://desperate-in-class.weebly.com/cindy-the-student-teacher-pees-her-panties.html Enjoy Tess MissMiniMe 1 Quote Link to comment
CECA 1 Posted January 18, 2018 Share Posted January 18, 2018 Nice story! You do a really good job drawing out the desperation and expressing the internal thoughts of the characters. I would say that the story needs a little more background, perhaps a description of what Lisa looks like or who some of the characters are. In addition, I believe it needs more of the protagonist's physical feelings. While you do express what the character is thinking and what is happening, it doesn't contain what the character physically feels (waves of desperation, pleasure when peeing, etc.). It's pretty common stories like this, the KozmoLotto, or other top stories on the site. Good luck and keep up the good work! Quote Link to comment
princesstess 6 Posted January 18, 2018 Author Share Posted January 18, 2018 12 hours ago, CECA said: Nice story! You do a really good job drawing out the desperation and expressing the internal thoughts of the characters. I would say that the story needs a little more background, perhaps a description of what Lisa looks like or who some of the characters are. In addition, I believe it needs more of the protagonist's physical feelings. While you do express what the character is thinking and what is happening, it doesn't contain what the character physically feels (waves of desperation, pleasure when peeing, etc.). It's pretty common stories like this, the KozmoLotto, or other top stories on the site. Good luck and keep up the good work! Agreed but for the classroom site I would need to figure how to keep it G Quote Link to comment
princesstess 6 Posted January 18, 2018 Author Share Posted January 18, 2018 50 minutes ago, princesstess said: Agreed but for the classroom site I would need to figure how to keep it G Looks like I need to take my site down and start over as my stories really fall short.... Quote Link to comment
nightwind 49 Posted January 19, 2018 Share Posted January 19, 2018 I think that your stories are very good! Don't give up... Quote Link to comment
MissMiniMe 331 Posted January 19, 2018 Share Posted January 19, 2018 Student teacher story is great. Quote Link to comment
CECA 1 Posted January 22, 2018 Share Posted January 22, 2018 On 1/18/2018 at 8:43 AM, princesstess said: Looks like I need to take my site down and start over as my stories really fall short.... I agree with nightwind. There's really no need to take down your past stories (it seemed like you put a lot of work into them). At least include them on your new website so that people can still view them if they wish. Quote Link to comment
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